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Soon

Bundled, trussed and wrapped

In wool, feather and fleece

Tight. Skin a flag of pursed pores

Waiting to fly and unfurl

A freckled release.

I have x rayed these bones for what

Seems like millenia. A fossil in the mud

Of three hundred sleeps

Soon, please, they will unroll and realign

Recognize I am newly awake, like the world.

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Ok, it’s a poem and I am not a poet. Be kind now.

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  1. correction, you are a poet, because you have written a poem, which I think is a good poem, with a nice spring loaded feel. The line ‘I have x-rayed these bones for what seemed like a millenia’ is intriguing and made me wonder if you had roots around buried bones in mind.
    ‘A fossil in the mud of three hundred sleeps’ has got to be a good line and a half. To me one of the qualities of a good poem is that it has lines like that which just feel right.

    May 11, 2013
    • Aw Plot52 you have made me very happy! The first poem to go public so a little trepidation involved. I was mainly thinking about how you get buried in winter and everything is hunched against the cold…but also hinting at the way some bodies/skeletons are found, as if they are asleep. But I like the roots line of enquiry…hey, that’s what great about them, open to interpretation.

      May 12, 2013
      • yes thats true, I think a poem should contain layers of mystery and ambiguity that the reader can peel away, perhaps only to reveal what their own imagination has added. But I also think the poet has to draw the reader in
        and communicate the essence of the poems meaning (even if this is only superficial), only then will the reader have the confidence to delve deeper. Its a difficult balance.

        May 13, 2013
  2. “Welcome back trees” ๐Ÿ™‚ Love the poem, the sentiment and my slowing down in harmony with it. “Goodbye leaves…time to focus on your roots and on soaking up as much rain as you can over winter”… Have a glorious, uplifting, green, happy day punctuated with moments of pure clean bliss ๐Ÿ™‚

    May 11, 2013
    • Thanks Fran ๐Ÿ™‚ Yes, it’s definitely a transition poem, glad you found something to tune into.

      May 12, 2013
      • I always find something in your wonderful words… a true wordsmith… kudos ๐Ÿ™‚

        May 12, 2013
  3. Rhonda Crowe #

    The poem is lovely – you most certainly are a poet! Have missed you! Hope all is well. I’ll bet the ladies are enjoying spring ๐Ÿ™‚

    May 11, 2013
    • That’s twice I’ve been called a poet now! All thanks to my lovely blog readers ๐Ÿ™‚ To be honest there have been a few things going on which are difficult, not least the slaughtering of Herald which was pretty traumatic, I was going to post about this but I’m still processing the whole event. You’re right, the girls are loving the spring, there is finally a bit of grass, though it is still cold.

      May 12, 2013
      • Rhonda Crowe #

        Dealing with difficult things can consume us all at some point and we need our time to deal and heal. I think traumatic is a very apt description of Herald’s situation-the hopes for the herd, the financial impact, and the fact that he was a truly beautiful bull with a great personality. It broke my heart when I read that you were going to lose him. I was starting to become a bit concerned when you were quiet for so long. Glad you are back ๐Ÿ™‚ Take care and my best to you and your husband.

        May 13, 2013
  4. Lovely! And you’ve freshened up your page – it’s beautiful.

    May 12, 2013
    • Thanks Tricia, glad you like the new look…and the poem. I like playing around a bit with the banner, still not totally satisfied!

      May 12, 2013
  5. Nice to see you again.

    May 12, 2013
  6. Lovely – and you’ve changed your name..?! I like it too.

    May 12, 2013
    • Yes, I suppose I want it to reflect what I write about more. Maybe swap to a new blog sometime . Glad you like it – a bit like yours! Better not call it Tenacres or you might sue me ๐Ÿ™‚ Thanks!

      May 13, 2013
      • Go for it – it has a nice ring ๐Ÿ™‚ I thought I was very original in my “Sevenacres” until I Googled it afterwards and found I’d been preceded by many – everything from horse sanctuaries to posh nursing homes!

        May 17, 2013
  7. What we call ourselves isn’t nearly so important as what we do, and you have done a wonderful poem! I especially like that last line – Recognize I am newly awake, like the world. That’s a perfect capture of Spring.

    I like the flag imagery, too. On our boats, the flag flies off the stern to show that the owner is aboard. Otherwise, they are taken down, tightly rolled and stowed away. I can see the unfurling world as that flag, flying to say, “Spring is here, and has climbed aboard!”

    The combination of your header photo and background is lovely. I almost can smell the freshness!

    May 14, 2013
    • Coming from a writer with your talents this makes me very happy indeed, thanks! Not that one should always be tossed hither and thither by praise or criticism but kind encouraging words can be just the tonic when at a low ebb.

      Iโ€™m interested to see that people pick up on different things โ€“ this was originally a much longer poem but in the end it seemed laboured so I cut it.

      Glad you like the new look. The background photo was taken a couple of years ago just outside the kitchen window and the header is of a hedge bank on Bodmin Moorโ€ฆnear and far.

      May 17, 2013
  8. Yes, it is a delightful and thoughtful poem..I do hope you post some more, there’s plenty of inspiration in your neck of the woods, from what I can remember :-)….. (I feel a little like we waited for springtime forever….!)

    May 24, 2013
    • And the rest Debbie, and the rest! I mean the lack of spring as I have still been bundled up for the last week, wristwarmers and all…

      Thanks for the encouraging words I am going to do a poetry course at some point so I hope to post some more one day. looking forward to going over to yours soon ๐Ÿ™‚

      May 25, 2013

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